Stolen from a comment on lady_krysis's MySpace

[lunesque]

He watches; as she struggles with fragile facts, sincere visions, and honorable defeats, the tears of heavenly belief fill the valley, raising the smell of hope to the heart of the immortalized pilgrim.

What, exactly, is 'the smell of hope'?

Is this absolute crap, or am I just being especially unforgiving?

Comments

[lunesque.livejournal.com]

I'm not talking about misspellings, really.

You're just... such a purple writer! Every time I read you, I completely lose what you're trying to say! We've had this conversation before. ^^;

[saekhwa]

Yeah, mostly because I'm trying to write an abstract image. I just go with how pretty the words sound to me. An interesting side note, the poetry I perform for competitions is such a concrete narrative, I feel bipolar.

Eh. *shrugs* Edit it away.